I drafted 7 perfect pages (or so I thought), but all I heard back was:

I drafted 7 perfect pages (or so I thought), but all I heard back was:

โ€œ๐๐จ ๐ก๐ž๐š๐๐ข๐ง๐ ๐ฌ?
๐๐จ ๐‡๐„๐€๐ƒ๐ˆ๐๐†๐’???
๐ƒ๐ข๐ ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎ ๐š๐œ๐ญ๐ฎ๐š๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ฒ ๐๐จ ๐š 7-๐ฉ๐š๐ ๐ž ๐…๐š๐œ๐ญ๐ฌ ๐ฌ๐ž๐œ๐ญ๐ข๐จ๐ง ๐ฐ๐ข๐ญ๐ก ๐๐Ž ๐ก๐ž๐š๐๐ข๐ง๐ ๐ฌ?โ€

The partner was incredulous, her voice rising in pitch and exasperation with each question

โ€”(all the while radiating that special, howโ€‘couldโ€‘youโ€‘beโ€‘soโ€‘stupid energy that BigLaw partners exude so well).

I was stunned. I genuinely had no idea what she meant. It was the first Statement of Facts Iโ€™d ever written, I mumbled, in a pathetic excuse.

Well, lesson learned.

I never again forgot headings or the power they have to break up long facts sections to make them more readable (and more persuasive).

So assuming youโ€™ve already internalized that same lesson, hereโ€™s my suggestion for your next Statements of Fact:

โžก๏ธ Try to tell a story with the headings โฌ…๏ธ

By the time the court reaches your argument, it should already be leaning toward your clientโ€”because of how youโ€™ve crafted your Facts section.

And you want the court to be able to scan it and see the story youโ€™re selling through headings alone.

To illustrate, consider the following from the Statement of Facts in a gender-based employment discrimination case.

A: ABC Co. hires P based on her job application.

B: P regularly arrives late to work, without explanation.

C: ABC warns P in writing about her tardiness.

D: P continues to arrive late.

E: ABC discovers P lied on her job application.

F: ABC investigates and confirms the lie.

G: ABC terminates P for tardiness and dishonesty.

Thatโ€™s a pretty compelling story from the employerโ€™s perspective, right? And as you would have guessed, the above comes from ABCโ€™s brief.

Might you try a similar framework in your next Facts section?

Try it and let me know how you do!

๐Ÿ’Œ Amanda

#DearLegalWriter

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